Sunday, November 11, 2007

Final Choice

He cinched the rope and closed his eyes
Her absence prompted final choice
Thunderous clouds had filled his skies
Swallowing his lonesome voice

His soul entangled among his bride
No longer able to sort the pain
Now that she had left his side
Only the broken half remained

He had carefully planned the end
Attempting to find secluded place
A deserted bridge would lend
Finality to the fall from grace

His knees began to quiver
Beneath this burdensome load
He heard the rushing of the river
Calling from far below

With one final shout
The deed was now complete
He watched her flail about
With rope that bound her hands and feet

6 comments:

writerwoman said...

WOW! I thought he was doing himself in, not her. Nice twist.

These are my favorite lines:
Now that she had left his side
Only the broken half remained


Especially love the phrase the broke half. I wish I came up with that one.

_Soulless_ said...

Loved the suspense in the second half of the piece; and, of course, the twist in the end (you've managed it well -- made me gasp).

Dan said...

Sarah & soulless hoped to bring a surprise. My wife(test reader & critic) didn't like it. She didn't care for the topic, but was surprised. Thanks for visiting

Bubba said...

Wives seem to be rather narrow-minded when confronted with such things, don't they?

A word of warning... you might want to do something nice for her... soon... she knows when you're asleep. Heehee!

Dan said...

I contemplated not letting her read this one. I convinced I was still in the Halloween mood, but I have slept soundly since!

health quotes said...

Especially love the phrase the broke half.Loved the suspense in the second half of the piece;